On “Mariah’s Govt 2305 Blog,” Mariah writes in her recent editorial reasons of why the new bill limiting young voters would be a problem. She overall conveys the message clearly and has a persuasive voice. She weaves in bits of quotes to give proof of what is going on without taking away from the readability. Her balance of facts and opinions gives her editorial validity and makes it convincing.
There are several issues though, that I think take away from the editorial’s power and flow. I think that the focus should be entirely on the young voter issue. The solutions given are more related to the issue of a lack of voters in general. There are a several sentences that are a little confusing. A couple of sentences begin as comments and then end as questions. I think that splitting the sentence into a comment and then following with a question would be most effective. There are other grammatical problems that are also easily fixable.
Overall, I think Mariah has a good argument that informs and persuades.
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